Photo Reflection is a summary and a reflection of White(1987)’s article Nine Successful Women
Exploring
Zina Schiff, a musician who had studied in a music conservatory instead of a high school. She went to University of California, Berkley, where she could try more courses and explore fields except music. She chose a psychology course at Berkley and she learnt a lot, far more than what she would have learnt in the music conservatory. The college brought her profound influences, which put her in a favorable situation in her life.
Source:http://patch.com/massachusetts/peabody/merrimack-valley-philharmonic-features-violinist-zina-schiff-and-conductor-avlana-eisenberg-may-3rd
“…in the typical thing for me to do would have been to continue at Curtis, where only music courses are offered. But instead I went to Berkley, where I could try courses that I never would have considered at a specialized school.”
Citation: White, K. (1987). Nine Successful women tell how college changed their lives. In L. Behrens, & L.J. Rosen (Eds.), Reading for college writers (pp. 325-330). Boston: Little, Brown, and Company.
Wasn’t it too boring if a man just explores one certain field in his whole life? My answer is definitely yes. The world’s so vast and why don’t I experience more? Zina Schiff chose to explore more in college and so will I. I’m majoring in Engineering but how exhausted it is to deal with numbers and formulas! Picking up courses such as sociology and designing is exactly what I’m going to do.
By exploring in other fields in college, I will learn much more than just focusing on a single field. And then, the most exciting step is combination of knowledge of various fields. Just like Schiff, I will develop plenty of creative ideas and unique thoughts, which would unquestionably do benefit to my further academic and social lives. So, all in all, by the means of exploring new fields in college, I and Schiff are quite in common.
Hi, Haonan！This is Peng Chen. Greetings from Beijing:) I think you did a really job on your photo reflection project. First, the structure of your article is very clear. Second, you used your own experience to illustrate your common point with Zina Schiff. Furthermore, I also admire the people expert on many fields. For example, when I was in high school, I appreciated the students who can get high scores on both science and arts subjects. Finally, hope you could be harvested in your sociology and designing courses. Good luck!
Thank you for comment! Best wishes to you too!
After reading your article, I would say: I like your writing style because it’s very clear to read! I’ve never used this kind of essay arrangement but I would like to try. Additionally, I suggest that you have used too much words for citation instead of analysis or reflection. Also, I feel a little insufficient about connections between Zina Schiff and yourself. I suggest that you can use more of your own experiences to further illustrate the similarities or differences between you two. Furthermore, I think you may need to explain disadvantages of exploring only one field or advantages of multiple-learning, so that your article would be more convincing and persuasive.
Hope my opinions would help you achieve more, best wishes!
Hello, Haonan!
Like Jiaxong, I was impressed with your creative and articulate writing style. I agree that students should take time to explore during college, rather than limiting themselves to just one area of study. By diversifying her coursework, Zina Schiff was able to make the most out of her college experience–it seems that you are making a similar choice by studying a variety of topics in addition to engineering. I encourage you to maintain this spirit of curiosity throughout your undergraduate career!
(I apologize for misspelling Jiaxiang’s name in my previous comment!)