2 thoughts on “Draft

  1. I really like the layout and format of your paper. You presenting with a lot of credible and interesting facts. Are you going to go back and add more information to the paper to make it longer? What graphs/charts are you going to use? I really like how prepared you are that you have introduction and conclusion done as well!

  2. The structure of your paper is excellent. I also like how you transition between facts and explain what the facts mean after you cite them. I know the context section is difficult. You may want to include a graph there to further explain the situation of co-ed housing. Also, in the context section, take some time to explain why it is currently an issue. It may be a good idea to include a current event in your context paragraph. I did like how well your facts flowed and how you tied them back into your thesis throughout the paper. Having said that, you may want to begin to include more graphs in your essay. I’m impressed by the quality of your rough draft. – Maximilian Kerns

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