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Here is a working rough for my paper; it is subject to change as I may find better sources and potential argumentative points. This is also an extension of my outline, as I already basically wrote a rough draft in it.

Introduction before thesis: Anxiety. A topic that plagues humanity, especially in today’s society. (I will include statistics to grab my reader’s attention).

Thesis: Anxiety in college students and academia as a whole is widespread, with the psychology behind the mind proving there are scientific and social reasons behind why it can be detrimental.

First Argument (As of right now): Anxiety is a mental health issue that has an impact on many people. In fact, its influence spans across kids and students to a great degree. Identifying how many kids has it is very important to be able to properly delegate enough resources to it in schools. With the amount seen, schools should be putting a lot of funding towards bettering treatment for anxiety and mental health as a whole.

Rebuttal for First Argument: Students can actively seek out their own resources to cope with anxiety separate from schools.

Second Argument (As of right now – I will use this to step back and show how anxiety starts early, coinciding with schooling): Anxiety is something that has a grip on many people’s lives, but where does it start? Evidence shows that anxiety can and will likely develop in early childhood due to many factors. With this knowledge, and the knowledge that school is a part of a young child’s life all through their teen years, schools and universities must realize that and help more.

Rebuttal for Second Argument: Anxiety is something that can be just as likely seen in adults, so focus should be placed on both adults and children. While this is true, if anxiety is taken seriously early on, it will reduce the impact and potential causes of it later on in life.

Third Argument(As of right now – Will go into the treatments for schools that need to be taken): Argument on how schools have support right now, but can have more things that will help better.

Conclusion: With anxiety showing up in children early, it is imperative schools take action to help prevent and deal with anxiety and mental health. As seen, the likelihood of anxiety developing early is extremely high. School’s have begun implementing resources for anxiety, but more needs to be done. This will eventually become the baseline for all schools, with the intended goal of anxiety decreasing from its recent trend of increasing throughout the past half century.

Sources:

“Mental Health Support.” Counseling and Consultation Service, ccs.osu.edu/services/mental-health-support.

“Data and Statistics on Children’s Mental Health.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, 22 Mar. 2021, www.cdc.gov/childrensmentalhealth/data.html.

Kagan, Jerome, and Nancy Snidman. “Early Childhood Predictors of Adult Anxiety Disorders.” Biological Psychiatry, Elsevier, 2 Dec. 1999, www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0006322399001377.

I commented on Keenan Mason’s and Tareq Alwadeya’s pages a while back, but the comments are not visible on their page because of privacy settings.

Comment for Keenan: I think as a first argument this is very strong. COVID-19 has had many social impacts on me, so I can relate to the topic. Without bias however, I think this is a topic that relates to many people. My only suggestion would be to expand upon how it can cause anxiety, which you mentioned at the end. Thank you for covering a topic that is strongly impacting the world.

Comment for Tareq: (One beginning of Argument) – I think you bring up a lot of relevant topics for your discussion. I think that COVID has impacted many students in many different ways. My only suggestion to you would be to narrow your argument down a bit, as you mentioned a lot of great things but it might just be best to focus on one. Overall, I think you are going in a direction that needs to be talked about, as society and students have struggled a lot in the pandemic. Your reasons for showing how people have struggled are spot on.

Here is a working outline for my paper; it is subject to change as I may find better sources and potential argumentative points.

Thesis: Anxiety in college students and academia as a whole is widespread, with the psychology behind the mind proving there are scientific and social reasons behind why it can be detrimental.

First Argument (As of right now): Anxiety is a mental health issue that has an impact on many people. In fact, its influence spans across kids and students to a great degree. Identifying how many kids has it is very important to be able to properly delegate enough resources to it in schools. With the amount seen, schools should be putting a lot of funding towards bettering treatment for anxiety and mental health as a whole.

Rebuttal for First Argument: Students can actively seek out their own resources to cope with anxiety separate from schools.

Second Argument(As of right now – I will use this to step back and show how anxiety starts early, coinciding with schooling): Anxiety is something that has a grip on many people’s lives, but where does it start? Evidence shows that anxiety can and will likely develop in early childhood due to many factors. With this knowledge, and the knowledge that school is a part of a young child’s life all through their teen years, schools and universities must realize that and help more.

Rebuttal for Second Argument (Need some assistance for this one): Anxiety is something that can be just as likely seen in adults.

Third Argument(As of right now – Will go into the treatments for schools that need to be taken): Argument on how schools have support right now, but can have more things that will help better.

Potential source for third argument, showing how schools/universities have resources:

“Mental Health Support.” Counseling and Consultation Service, ccs.osu.edu/services/mental-health-support.

Still in progress conclusion (Will go more in to depth): With anxiety showing up in children early, it is imperative schools take action to help prevent and deal with anxiety and mental health.

I will use this argument after my second one, to discuss where anxiety stems from:

Anxiety is something that has a grip on many people’s lives, but where does it start? Evidence shows that anxiety can and will likely develop in early childhood due to many factors. With this knowledge, and the knowledge that school is a part of a young child’s life all through their teen years, schools and universities must realize that and help more.

Source regarding anxiety developing early in life from my annotated bibliography:

Kagan, Jerome, and Nancy Snidman. “Early Childhood Predictors of Adult Anxiety Disorders.” Biological Psychiatry, Elsevier, 2 Dec. 1999, www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0006322399001377.

A second argument that I will use for my paper, potentially more towards the beginning:

Anxiety is a mental health issue that has an impact on many people. In fact, its influence spans across kids and students to a great degree. Identifying how many kids has it is very important to be able to properly delegate enough resources to it in schools. With the amount seen, schools should be putting a lot of funding towards bettering treatment for anxiety and mental health as a whole.

Source of anxiety in kids from my annotated bibliography:

“Data and Statistics on Children’s Mental Health.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, 22 Mar. 2021, www.cdc.gov/childrensmentalhealth/data.html.

Here is a beginning of argument for my topic of anxiety in academia:

Schooling is a time of a person’s life where they’re developing the most. With this knowledge, problems are bound to arise. Studying can cause a large degree of stress. Combine this with a student already having preexisting anxiety, many detrimental effects are imminent. The main question to be answered though, however, is: Can it be proven that anxiety detrimentally affects a student to the point more precautions should be put into place?

(Potential) Source to be used from my annotated bibliography:

“Mental Health Support.” Counseling and Consultation Service, ccs.osu.edu/services/mental-health-support.

As I will most likely wrap up my paper with the conclusion that anxiety needs to be appropriately dealt with for students, it’s important to recognize that our own university, Ohio State, has implementations that show how they hold it to the utmost of importance.

“Mental Health Support.” Counseling and Consultation Service, ccs.osu.edu/services/mental-health-support.

Data and statistics on children with anxiety:

“Data and Statistics on Children’s Mental Health.” Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, 22 Mar. 2021, www.cdc.gov/childrensmentalhealth/data.html.

I think this would be useful for my research paper as I will be discussing how anxiety has an adverse impact on students. It may be useful to talk about how it develops early on in a lot of cases.

Kagan, Jerome, and Nancy Snidman. “Early Childhood Predictors of Adult Anxiety Disorders.” Biological Psychiatry, Elsevier, 2 Dec. 1999, www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0006322399001377.