Thesis:
While carbon fiber is not as cost effective as traditional materials, as innovations in fuel efficiency decrease, engineers must look at other areas of the car to improve efficiency. with the use of carbon fiber, cars would be more efficient, and there would be less greenhouse gasses. With the added strength attributed to carbon fiber, cars would be safer.
Argument:
Carbon fiber , due to new government regulations is becoming increasingly more attractive for use in automotive applications. This is because while powertrain technologies are advancing, they are not advancing at a fast enough pace to maintain and increase fuel efficiency. As a result, The weight of the car must be decreased in order to reach the goals set forth in the new regulations. However, carbon fiber’s use does not come without its caveats. Carbon fiber is known for being difficult and time consuming to work with. If carbon fiber can be designed and manufactured in a manner that would allow for high volume production, there would be no question about if carbon fiber should be used in automotive manufacturing.
Sources:
Decker, L., & Truskin, J. (2015). Design of a Composite Structural Panel for High Volume Production. SAE International Journal of Passenger Cars: Mechanical Systems, 8(2), 531–537. https://doi.org/10.4271/2015-01-1311
BABJAK, Š., DÚBRAVČÍK, M., & KENDER, Š. (2012). Composites in the Automotive Production. Annals of the Faculty of Engineering Hunedoara – International Journal of Engineering, 10(3), 77–82. Retrieved from http://proxy.lib.ohio-state.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=102165577&site=ehost-live
I think you have a great thesis and your argument is really coming together. As you write your next outline/argument, try incorporating some of the information from your sources into the argument itself. Unless you already did that, I just cited them within the text because I feel like my argument had more backbone when I did this!
You have a great format to this. I like the way you presented it and your argument is coming along. I would be weary of citations with your citations and make sure it is all correctly formatted and done correctly. Job well done.